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Post ID: 91293 Posted at: 10-Mar-2005 17:21:56
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i thought about this story for awile so i decided to post it not all just yet though.
chapter 1
Rayku and Marky

ss2 automatic
pow boom haaaaaaaa
(then rayku blasts the hyoken wave)
HYyyyy-ooooookk-eennnnn waveeeee!!!!!!!!
cell: No!!!!!!!!!!
Rayku:yes nobody beats me
Marky:nice Rayku this competition is having much more action now
Rayku: hey im mad good at fighting
Marky: say what you want but im better than you
Rayku:what i could kill you if i wanted!!!!!! but since your my friend im not so be happy
Marky: what (Marky sais in his head whatever)
Rayku: i heard that
Marky:what
Rayku: what you said in your head
Marky:...
Rayku: yeah i can read your mind
(marky leaves)
???: hey Kid
Rayku:im a teenager thank you
???: whatever
Rayku:loser im 14 shut your mouth
???:lets fight then if im a loser
Rayku: no id rather not
???:do you even know who i am?
Rayku: yeah i bet Jason evil Jason
evil Jason:well howd you guest
Rayku:well cause my brother Jason doesnt call me a kid thats how
Evil Jason: ha good thinking
ss4 Goku: hey Rayku you need help with this guy
Rayku:nah hes a nobody
ss4 Goku:ok if you need help tell me
Rayku: sure
(Goku flies away)
(Rayku transfroms)
Rayku: Haaaaaaaaaaaa
Rayku:beat me now im a super saiyan 2 now
Evil Jason: uhh uhoh
(fighting sounds)
Rayku: Darkness punch!!!!!!!!
Evil Jason:what Nooo please ahhhhhhhhhhh
Rayku:haaa mahahahahahahaha
evil Rayku :now i have control...
little did the Z warriors know Rayku had an evil side it came out once he was mad who know is his evil side going to help or kill the Z warriors who knows
Next Chapter
Evil Rayku
Dark Hyoken Wave !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! are you dead yet?
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Post ID: 91319 Posted at: 10-Mar-2005 17:52:24
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well this comic is really long i see
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Post ID: 91643 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 05:08:29
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O.k...
Sighs...
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Post ID: 91873 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 11:46:52
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i read it it is cool
DON'T MAKE ME GET MY BLADES OF CHAOS ON YOU!!
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Post ID: 91953 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 13:53:59
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thanks i had this ready since december i wasent a member since then though.
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Post ID: 91955 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 13:55:40
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the next episode is coming soon today or Saturday.
i typed all that not pasted but i will some time (paste it)
im not really 14 though
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Post ID: 91970 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 14:13:41
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Chapter 2
evil Rayku

evil Rayku:mahahahahaha finally i got out of his control now i have control
Goku:hey Rayku you beat that guy down i see
evil Rayku:... uhh yeah i sure did
Goku:(somethings not right)
Evil Rayku:(uhh it looks like hes thinking but how do i use Raykus mind reading powers
Goku:(let me a ask him some questions that the real Rayku would now only)
Goku:Rayku whats your highest super saiyan mode?
Evil Rayku:hmmmm ss3
Goku:aha i thought there was something strange about you Haaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!!!!!
ss3 Goku:lets fight
evil Rayku:no i cant!!!!!!!!
ss3 Goku:yeah looks like i over came your power
Evil Rayku:What!!!!!!!!!NO!!!!!!!!!
ss3 evil Rayku:i told you my highest mode is ss3
ss3 Goku:well than lets fight
(fighting sounds)
ss3 evil Rayku:Darkkkkkk Hyoooookennnn!!!!!!!!
ss3 Goku:(whoa!) no im too weak well then i need as much power as posible haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
ss3 evil Rayku:what the Hell is he doing?
ss5 Goku:NOw look at ny Golden hair black skin and orange redish clothes im too strong now
ss3 evil Rayku:noo i must get more power haaaaaaaaaaaaa
ss3 evil Rayku:what nooo
Rayku:what the where am i
ss5 Goku:Rayku your back
Rayku:who are you your power level is off the charts
ss5 Goku:i am Goku
well it looks like evil Rayku is gone but who knows if its the end
next Chapter
Gokus has little time
Dark Hyoken Wave !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! are you dead yet?
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Post ID: 91983 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 14:36:24
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this story/comic is as cool as ever still
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Post ID: 92003 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 14:49:15
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characters+profiles in comic are below
fusions
Raygeta:Rayku fuses with Goku to make this super powerful form
Gogeta:Goku and Vegeta does the fusion dance to make this fusion strong but an old fusion
characters
Rayku:a half Human half evil he has many unseen powers of his own (main character)
Marky:Raykus best friend they have been friends for a long long time(main character)
Goku:a saiyan from the planet Vegeta he learns a new powerful tech.later in this comic(im not spoiling it)(main character)
Vegeta:another saiyan from planet Vegeta he is a prince one of the proud saiyans because of his pride.because of his pride he has more anger (i think)
Goten (grown up): he comes up once Rayku and Goku fuse with a new attack he is super strong now that him and Rayku became friends
Trunks:He is from the Future but this trunks is the one in the presnet time he still has his sword but his powers increased from training with his dad Vegeta.
Ray: a new suprising character with the same powers as Rayku. (note: these question marks will disapper after the character is revealed)he is the son of Rayku very powerful stronger than Rayku while hes a teenager
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Post ID: 92103 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 15:42:26
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HOW COME YOU A.V. IS SO SMALL???
THE 2 MOST POWERFUL SAIYANS IN THE UNIVERSE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Post ID: 92117 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 15:48:04
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BY THE WAY WHEN IS THE NEXT COMIC COME OUT???
THE 2 MOST POWERFUL SAIYANS IN THE UNIVERSE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Post ID: 92152 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 16:16:50
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maybe today im not sure
well im not sure about why its so small but i have one though (at least)
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Post ID: 92158 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 16:31:09
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well yeah. but come on i need to read it now now now now!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Post ID: 92166 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 16:39:27
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Chapter 3
Goku has little time
Rayku:well i see that no one bad is around so i bett
???:better scram thats what you better do
Rayku:who are you?
???:you could call me Ray because i have the same name as you unless you want to call me Rayku
Rayku:Ray huh well ill kill you in no time
Ray:like you can
Rayku: Haaaa Hyoken wave!!
(The Hyoken had no effect but it hit)
Ray:ha power to my body
Rayku: wait if that dint effect you then
Ray: got you Hyoken wave!!!!!
Rayku:ahhh
Ray:ha that tell us both that im stronger if your hyoken wave dont effect but my does
Rayku:tell me Ray why are you here? and how?
Ray: because i am your son in the future that you named Rayku and you did something to me so bad that i came here to hurt you while you were still a kid or teenager.
Rayku: so tell me how old are you then?
Ray:im 16
Rayku:it looked like you were older then me but still (a super strong son) you are strong but im better!!!!!
Ray:dad i dont think so
Rayku: dont call me dad call me Rayku
Ray: fine Rayku
Rayku: (Goku hurry up and get here before Ray/Rayku kills me)
Goku: (hold on Rayku im coming)
Ray: now its time!!!! darknes punch
Rayku what thats my move though!!!
Ray: to bad
Rayku: ahh ahhhhhhh ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
(Rayku falls to the floor)
Ray:there now i will leave him here
Goku: noooo how Dare you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ss4 Goku:this should be enough power
Ray: Goku is that you?
ss4 Goku: how do you know my name?
Ray: because im from the Future
ss4 Goku: ohh i see like trunks
Ray: Trunks is he still alive
ss4 Goku: yeah he is. Rayku are you ok?
Rayku: yeah Goku just fight
ss4 Goku: ok
Ray: fine you fight me too then haaaa
ss4 Goku: fine then
ss1 Ray:lets go
(pow boom super powerful attacks sounds)
ss4 Goku: man hes tough
ss1 Ray: theres no point Goku im stronger
Rayku: Goku dont fight to the death
ss4 Goku:Rayku dont worry i have your back
Ray: hey if you kill mei will never be born Goku and i gave you the idea of the fusion in the future time to kill the evil King.
ss4 Goku: but why do you have that kind of hair and clothes i never seen anyone but Rayku have clothes and hair like that
Ray: well im Raykus son
ss4 Goku: what you mean i was going to kill Raykus son
Rayku: you got it
so now we know Rayku had a son in the future is this son going to try and kill any z warriors is he going to help or return to his time no body know until the next episode
Next Chapter
Raykus son
commets/questions(hey is this guy good or evil?)
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Post ID: 92167 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 16:40:32
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theres the next episode very long hope you like it
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Post ID: 92168 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 16:41:09
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another one may come in today im not sure
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Post ID: 92171 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 16:49:36
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me and Rayku both own this place because we are the same person
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Post ID: 92173 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 16:50:27
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the next comic will come soon im still thinking about it now im typing it
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Post ID: 92203 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 17:43:08
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Chapter 4
Raykus son
Rayku:so Ray I disrespected you and hurt your feelings and you come to the past and try to kill me!!!!!!!!
Ray:yeah you got it
Goku: well Rayku this is your fault you know
Rayku:hey I didn’t know I became I mean father in the future
Ray: well you did become a mean father
Rayku:im sorry Ray
Ray:its okay but I need to show you guys something
Rayku and Goku: what
Ray:follow me
(so they follow Ray)
Rayku:what and who is that
Ray: that is the eternal King who was born in the Future
(shaking sound)
???: who dares!!!!!! Awake me
Ray: ohh no I see how he got birth someone found him and he awoke
Rayku: hey even my power isn’t enough for this
Goku: maybe mine is
Rayku: you think so try him
Goku: ok haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
Ss4 Goku: is this enough power Rayku?
Ray and Rayku: no
Rayku: hey he was asking me
Ray: no me
Rayku:shut up!!!!!!
Ray: say that to my face and ill kill you
Rayku then you will die
ss4 Goku: guys please don’t keep that up we have the eternal King to face
Ray: Gokus right lets do it
(so they battled )
ss4 Goku:errr hes powerful but not strong enough for ss5 Haaaaaaaaaa
ss5 Goku: now I can win
(they battled again)
ss5 Goku: what this guy is invicible/immortal
Ray: why don’t you and my dad fuse
Rayku:stop calling me your dad I may be it but im too young to be a dad
Ss5 Goku: ok that works I just need to power down
Ss2 Goku: there now lets fuse Rayku
Rayku:you got it
Ss2 Goku and Rayku: fuuuu sionnnnn haaaaaa
Raygeta: yes we did it
Eternal King: who the hell are you
Raygeta:I ask the questions not you now
Who the Hell are you
Eternal King:nobody disrespects me!!!!!!!!!Die super Victory kamhamaha!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Raygeta: you must be a ******* a stupid one Super Hyoken kamahamaha!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Eternal King:what how was my blast blocked?
Raygeta:because were stronger than you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Eternal King: then I will kill the other one dieeeeee Dark kamahamaha!!!!!!
(Goku and Rayku unfused)
Rayku: Ray watch out
(Rayku jumped in front of Ray to protect him)
ss2 Goku: wheres Raykus body?
Eternal King: hahahahahaha mahahahahahaha I killed him
Ss2 Goku: nooooooooo this cant be
Dead world
Rayku: where am I?
King yemma: you are dead and you are in the dead world
Rayku: whoa that blast killed me
King Yemma: yes
Rayku: well I better get on a plane I need to go to HFIL for a few minutes
King Yemma:…
HFIL
dead Rayku: I better travel all over HFIL
dead Vegeta:how are you I never seen you before?
Dead Rayku: im Rayku Vegeta what are you doing here?
Dead Vegeta:I got killed by this guy he said his name was Rayku
Dead Rayku: it must be my son
Dead Vegeta: your son your too young to have a son
Dead Rayku: I mean from the future
Dead Vegeta:ok now I see
???:listen up everyone you may return to earth for 5 days then you will have to come back go and do what you need every second counts
dead Rayku: ok peace Vegeta
dead Vegeta: see you on Earth
well it looks like Rayku got killed at the right timing or else he would still be in HFIL
now he will be brought back to life for 5 days who knows what will happen until the next episode
Chapter 5
Rayku and Vegeta return to Earth
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Post ID: 92205 Posted at: 11-Mar-2005 17:43:51
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WWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!! BY THE WAY AWSOME COMICS!!!
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