Yeah, I was afraid it was a little too cliche. I know exactly what you mean by fake, so I'll definitely try to extend it. This is just the beginning of it. I have until January 5th to make it as good as I can, so plenty of time to work on it.
The whole idea behind this is that there was love before, something happened that broke it down, but now it's springing up again with even more passion, so I was thinking about adding a line in there that reads something along the lines of "I'll never let another day just pass us by again"
I was also wanting to add a line comparing "A love so pure" to "The first breath of newborn child", but the whole idea of the newborn child also seems cliche to me. Anybody have suggestions for what to compare "Pure love" to? Maybe something to the effect of "A love as pure and beautiful as the pristine mountain snow"?
Anyways, thanks for the comment, TV =]