The Iron Phoenix

This is a story about 5 warriors that live in different village and each one of them has a fate with the legendary Iron Pheonix until one fatful day the portal to the demon world opens because of an 1,000 year old demon named Bardock the king of demonworld tried to get back to where he came from.The Iron Pheonix made him flee when the demon attacked it.when the whole contienent of armania learns of this they get attacked by all kinds of demons.the first town that was attacked by demons was a small village called Imil.A powerful sprit warrior named Artemis lives there.Him and his warriors fought over 200 demons attacking the village.There was only a couple of survivors in the battle.A 8 year old boy named Roy parents were killed.Artemis saw that he was the child of fate.(which means that he will be the first human to meet the Iron Phoenox.)He adopted him and trained him for 12 years physicaly and mentaly.When his training was complete the demons atacked again and killed evreybody exept for Artemis and Roy.Artemis had a sword stabbed through him and told Roy to do the Forbiden techniqe called eternal flame.Roys hidden powers awakened and he destroyed 500 demons in 1 sweep of the techniqe! after that Artemis said that Roy was ready to go on the journey for the Iron Pheonix.Artemis died.His last words was that the eternal flame could not be used through anger (like he did in the battle against the the demons)it takes intense focus and determination to do it.Artemis died.With a heavy heart Roy went on his journey.That it is all folks if you want to add the towns and people Roy meets post it on here.THANX!^_^

Cool. Looks like it'll be a good one!! ^_^

OK! it'll be FOON!

Who is Foon GIve the town he/she was born in and other info

I'll join.This sound like a good one.

CHAPTER 1 Akuma the fire demon
After Roy left the village of Imil he was in the field of paradise.
He was on the search for any powerful warriors to aid him on his crusade on the mysterious demon that destroyed his master Artemis and his village. then he came across a wounded soldier.Roy asked him what had happened and the soldier said that it wasnt the field of paradise it was Hell. then he said there were these 4 demons that were the commanders of Bardocks 4 armies.The soldier said thatThe army that attacked his village was the Fire demons army.The commanders name was Akuma.the soldier said that said that his army was oblieterated by Akuma and he was the only one that survived.He said that he was the one who killed the legendary Artemis.The soldier died.Roy remembered how the village was slautered and went into Hells field.It really was Hell because there were torn apart soldiers and demons evreywhere.When Roy saw this Akuma came out of nowhere and struck Roy.Akuma saw that he was the child of fate and said you would never awaken the Iron Pheonix.Akuma stoped And looked at him in anger and said your the one that beat my aemy in one swoop of an attack!Killing you will be fun! Roy got up and said you basterd I will get revenege for Artemis and my people by destroying you and sending you straight back to hell!!Akuma said that he was the first one to talk to him like that.Akuma was angered.and they charged to each other.To be continued...If you like this post how you felt about it THANX!!!^_^

Cool, good story line. I would know... I write stories myself.

Chapter 2 will be coming.

K hurry up this is good.

It's not bad...but I'm not sure if the place is called imil or Lmil.

This is a good one.

Chapter 2 Roy VS Akuma
Roy used his fist of eternity on akuma.(fist of eternity is 200 puches in one attack)Before Roy got to him Akuma came with acouterattack with his hells fury attack and merly burned Roy to death.Roy got up and said What the hell was that! As Akuma was laughing he told Roy that his attack was called hells fury.Akuma said that it was a big ball of flame that is over 2,000 degrees.He said that once you are hit with it there is nothing left of you not even ashes!As Roy tried to attack him head on with an right kick to the face akuma took his leg and tried to slam his entire body into the ground. Just as roy was about to hit the ground akuma had a second thout and threw him into a boulder.Is this the best you can do?said Akuma.Not by a long shot!said Roy.Akuma threw a right jab to his face but roy blocked it and countered with his fist of etenity!As akuma tried to block it Roy came in on his stomach and hit him over 200 times!Akuma fell to the ground.Roy jumped up high in the air and used his Aerial assult attack.Akuma got up qiuckly and doged his attack!Roy was stumbeld.Akuma got mad and said it is time to take my power to level 2!As Akuma powered up Roy took off his shirt and said it is time to use my Dark Lightning!Roy began to channel his power. The ground cracked,the sky rushing with clounds Roy and Akuma used their most powerful attacks Roy used dark lightning and akuma used hells fury as their attacks collided with each others there were flares and electricity flying everywhere!Until thir attacks broke up and hit each other.Roy was screaming in pain as hells fury got to him.Akuma as well he was screaming in pain also.They both fell to the ground and were out of sprit power.Akuma was the first to get up he said get up boy I know your alive.Roy got up and said you are a real dumba** huh.Akuma said the hell you talkin bout boy.Roy said were both out of energy so lets go toe to toe!Akuma said hey kid your talkin my style lets go!Akuma rushed to Roy with a smile on his face Roy threw a left punch to his stomach Akuma grabbed is arm and broke his sholder!Roy was scraming in pain.Akuma laghed as if it was a comedy show.Akuma said that was funny how you scramed you scramed like artemis when I killed him.Roys power went off the charts!Roy poped his sholder back in place and used Dark lightning.Akuma in a painful death screamed IM SORRY BARDOCK I FAILED!!!!!!Roy with a smile on his face fell to the ground uncoucious.the field turned into paradise again.6 hours later he woke up in a medical facility in the sacred city.TO BE CONTINUED....If you liked this post it on here.THANX!^_^

On 07-Jan-2005 Xtreme gamer said:

Chapter 2 Roy VS Akuma
Roy used his fist of eternity on akuma.(fist of eternity is 200 puches in one attack)Before Roy got to him Akuma came with acouterattack with his hells fury attack and merly burned Roy to death.Roy got up and said What the hell was that! As Akuma was laughing he told Roy that his attack was called hells fury.Akuma said that it was a big ball of flame that is over 2,000 degrees.He said that once you are hit with it there is nothing left of you not even ashes!As Roy tried to attack him head on with an right kick to the face akuma took his leg and tried to slam his entire body into the ground. Just as roy was about to hit the ground akuma had a second thout and threw him into a boulder.Is this the best you can do?said Akuma.Not by a long shot!said Roy.Akuma threw a right jab to his face but roy blocked it and countered with his fist of etenity!As akuma tried to block it Roy came in on his stomach and hit him over 200 times!Akuma fell to the ground.Roy jumped up high in the air and used his Aerial assult attack.Akuma got up qiuckly and doged his attack!Roy was stumbeld.Akuma got mad and said it is time to take my power to level 2!As Akuma powered up Roy took off his shirt and said it is time to use my Dark Lightning!Roy began to channel his power. The ground cracked,the sky rushing with clounds Roy and Akuma used their most powerful attacks Roy used dark lightning and akuma used hells fury as their attacks collided with each others there were flares and electricity flying everywhere!Until thir attacks broke up and hit each other.Roy was screaming in pain as hells fury got to him.Akuma as well he was screaming in pain also.They both fell to the ground and were out of sprit power.Akuma was the first to get up he said get up boy I know your alive.Roy got up and said you are a real dumba** huh.Akuma said the hell you talkin bout boy.Roy said were both out of energy so lets go toe to toe!Akuma said hey kid your talkin my style lets go!Akuma rushed to Roy with a smile on his face Roy threw a left punch to his stomach Akuma grabbed is arm and broke his sholder!Roy was scraming in pain.Akuma laghed as if it was a comedy show.Akuma said that was funny how you scramed you scramed like artemis when I killed him.Roys power went off the charts!Roy poped his sholder back in place and used Dark lightning.Akuma in a painful death screamed IM SORRY BARDOCK I FAILED!!!!!!Roy with a smile on his face fell to the ground uncoucious.the field turned into paradise again.6 hours later he woke up in a medical facility in the sacred city.TO BE CONTINUED....If you liked this post it on here.THANX!^_^

cool isnt it?

On 07-Jan-2005 Xtreme gamer said:

cool isnt it?

I am Nigthfire ok the ministry of darkness

Its good but does it have to be that long.I had to just glance at everything and I'm a good reader.

chapter 3 The mysterious sword It is long but sweet!
as Roy woke up in a medical facilty he was hearing that the child of fate is here.Roy got up of bed and said what happened?then a nurse named Lena came in and said when we saw the bursts of light in the feild we came as soon as possible then right when we got there your attack killed Akuma and you passed out.Roy asked who is this we you are talking about? Lena answered The Sacred Healers.Roys eyes widend.Roy with a surprising tone said I heard you people can heal the greatest of sickness.Lena replied thats right.Lena told Roy to stay in bed for the day because the Holy ones have a test for you tommorow.Roy asked what is the test?Lena replied youll see tommorow,just get some sleep okay.Roy went to sleep.Next day at 9:00AM Roy woke up.Lena was sitting right beside him.Lena said put on these new clothes,brush your teeth,take a shower and I will fix your hair.Roy did all these things.While he was getting his hair fixed he said you remind me of my mother.She used to tell me all those things evrey time I woke up.Lena was happy and said you are the 1st person to say that around here.After Roys hair was done a warrior named Quake came in and said are you the one Roy?Roy said yes,then follow me then said Quake.while they were walking Roy asked what were thier namesand Quake responded in a pround tone the names Quake and the beutifull young lady was Lena.Roy asked where are you taking me?Quake said The chamber of warriors.by that time they arrived.Quake said A tournement was taking place for a sword made by the Iron Pheonix. The sword was called Fate.Only the true warrior could have the honor of having such a sword.Roy was the first to fight.he was going against Viper the deadly.he was known to fight off 400 demons with his bare hands.The sacred elder came out and introduced them.Then the battle began!Roy said so your the one called Viper huh?I wanted to fight you when I heard about you while training with my master.Viper replied your the one who beat Akuma you look different the way I heard about you. Roy aid skip the talking lets go!Viper came in with a speed greater than akumas.Roy was hesitating trying to hit him and Viper did an attack called Razor wind snake it put roy in a tornado and Roy said what the hell is this!?Viper said that when you get trapped in his wind the wind will bite you just like a viper.Roy was bitten over 10 times!Then the wind stoped.roys clothes were already messed up Roy with a painful moan said ouch!Viper was surprised and said you shold be in the uncouncious state by now!!Roy got up and said Damn.. I didnt know you were so weak.viper got angry and started swinging wildly on him Roy blocked all 500 of Vipers hits and Roy did Fist of Eternity on him and Knocked out Viper.He was the winner.He found out that he was the strongest there and swept through the compititon.The elder made him champion and roy got the fate.It was a cool sword it had a flame on the handle and a Iron pheonix on its blade.Roy handled it with ease and got the shi to it (its the thing that holds the sword)and tried to leave but there was one more test! He had to fight the legendary swordsman that Slayed over 2,000 demons in one swipe!!His name was Sion.Roy was escorted out into the field of paradise for evrey to see the greastest battle ever!!Roy and Sion were announced.Then sion pulled out his blade.LET THE BATTLE BEGIN!!!TO BE CONTINED....sorry I got carried away on chapter 2.But I hope Ypu liked this one because The next chapter will be hot and short!

Cool, you are good I will admit but take it from someone who has written stories like these since I was ten. Make quotes, give more emotion to the characters, show what they are thinking with ~ and what they say with ". Believe me it will make your story more interesting.

I totally agree with Raikou. Space the paragraphs, make quotes, and it looks good!

I agree with her too.Also use grammer better.Include ; : ' and other stuff.

Ok, I feel special ppl r agreeing wit me!