Dragonball Universe!

This is my Idea of the next series of Dragonball. This is after GT, But before AF. Here are some changes I had to make to fit this story line:
1. Goku did not absorbe the Dragon balls.
2. Goku did not leave with Shennron for where ever he went.
3. Goku was wished back to his adult form.
4. Buu and Uub de-fused and became their normal form(Buu did not become Kid Buu, just normal good Buu.)
5. Krillin shaved his head and went back into fighting.
6. Piccolo came back to life.
7. The Hyperbiolic Time Chamber door was fixed.
8. The rules of the Chamber were abolished, so now you can go in as many times as you need.
9. Also more than two people can be in the Chamber at once.
10. Videl's power has incresed dramatiaclly, but she can't shoot ki based attack (Kamehame, Distrcto Disc, not even a basic ki blast.)
11. Pan is a little older and stronger, but can't go Super Saiyan yet.
12. Yamcha has decided to pick up fighting again.
13. Tien is back and ready to fight.
14. Hercule is even weaker than before, but got his hair back cause he looks so stupid with out it.
15. Trunks has become the first one we met(From the future).
16. Trunks and Goten fuse when needed.
17. Everyone in HFIL has been training so hard they are able to make a hole in the demition and can hold it open long enough for one person to go through, but it takes up so much power that they can only do it at different intervals of time.
18. King Kai has noticed number 17, but for some reason he can't contact the Z warriors to tell them this.
19. A secret person is coming, I won't tell who it is, but he is a pure blood saiyan.
20. A new power has been discovered that will change Dragonball/Z/GT forever.
21. After the defeat of the Shadow Dragons, the negitive energy was zapped from the Dragon Balls forever, so the Shadow Dragons will never be able to come out of the dragon balls

Wow,thats a good theory.

Thanks. Hey Tom, as soon as I get the first episode done, cam you move it to the Role play section? you can do that right?

Dragonball Universe episode 1: King Kai's warning.

King Kai: Bah I don't under stand why Goku isn't answering.
Goku: Hey, this is Goku. . .
King Kai: (Finally) Goku!! This is horrible I . . .
Goku: I'm not hear right now. Leave a message after the beep. Beeeeeeeep.
Chi-Chi: Goku the machine makes a beep by it's self!
King Kai: (When did Goku get an answering machine?) Goku this is King Kai, we have a problem! H. . .
he needs a make a shorter greeting. Wait, I am I calling his house?

Later we find Gohan looking his dad.
Gohan: Dad, where are you?
Goku(Singing): Nah nah nah nah nah nah washin' in a barrel. Nah nah nah nah nah nah washin' in a barrel.
Gohan: Dad?
Goku: EEEEEEEEEEEEEE. Gohan, what are you doing here?
Gohan: I was trying to get everyone together for a game of Ki Ball, but you seem kinda busy so I'll just come back soon. Hey dad?
Goku: Yes Gohan?
Gohan: When did we install a bubble maker?
Goku: Oops.

Later.
Uub: Nah nah nah nah nah nah workin' on my tan!
Goku & Gohan: Ummm Uub?
Uub: How long have you been standing there?
Gohan: Long enough.
Goku: Come on Uub, were gonna play some Ki ball.
Uub: Sweeeeeeeeet! I love Ki ball, where are we gonna play?
Gohan: The Lookout.

Even later, up at the Lookout.
Piccolo: Nah nah nah nah nah nah workin' on my green!
Everyone: Uhh Piccolo?
Piccolo: How long have you been standing there?
Everyone: Long enough.
Goten: Come on Piccolo, were gonna play some Ki ball! Hey dad?
Goku: Yes?
Goten: What's Ki ball?
Then they do that thing where everyone falls on the ground.
Ki ball is what happenes when you deflect the Ki blast back and forth.

5 hours later, it's Goku and Vegeta.
Back and fourth
Vegeta: I will win this Kakarrot! Perpare your self(Goes Super Saiyan)
Goku: Alright then(Goes Super Sayian also)
Vegeta: I'll do one better!(SS2)
Goku: Let's finish this!(Goes SS3) Haha!
Vegeta: Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh(he's chargeing)hhhhhhhhhhhhhhh(Goes SS4!) Ha!
Goku: (Deep voice) I'm stronger this time. (goes SS4)
Vegeta: Oh f*ck this! Final Shine!!
Goku: 10xKa-me-ha-me-ha!
Beams are pushing back and fourth
King Kai: GOKU!
Goku: Huh?
get's hit with blast
Vegeta: Ha, now I AM the strongest.
King Kai: Shut up Vegeta, everyone know's that Goku is stronger.
Now listen all of you! Everyone in HFIL has found a way to break the barrier between their world and yours! Their is only one power that can help you!
Goku: What is it?
King Kai: The mighty ball of ki, time, and space.

To be continued, Next episode: A new Hero.

Didnt we tell you to put the comics in the General Boards?

Oops. Sorry, I just wanted y'all to see it and the find out if you or T0ms0nic could move it somewhere.

Im not a mod on this forum,so i can't move it to Role Play.Z Warrior,Xyber,Jay or DBZ Warrior will have to move it.

ok.

By the way, Jay and DBZ WARRIOR are no longer moderators on this forum. Now it is just me and Xyber.

Topic moved to Roleplay/Fan Fic forum

Episode2: A new Hero
Goku: The ball of what? How is a ball going to help us?
King Kai: This is no ordanariy ball Goku, This ball alone could have more power than the Black-Star Dragonballs.
Krillin: No way King Kai, the BSDBs(Black Star Dragon Balls) are all powerful!
King Kai: This ball is stronger, but don't worry Krillin, this is a very, very good type of energy ball.
King Kai goes into a small speech about what he knows about this ball(which is very little)
Videl: Well that was about a clear as mud.
Pan: Don't worry mom, King Kai'll find out everything about the ball-a-ma-bob.(Who is King Kai anyways?)
King Kai: I'll get to work on it Pan.

Later

King Kai: Kibito Kai, I need your help. I've been looking through every book I can find.
Kibito Kai: I'm sorry North Kai, I know just as much about the ball of Ki, time, and space as you do.

Suddenly
BOOM! Old Kai comes in to the Other World book store, his hair and clothes shinged, his face covered in ash, a a strange smell coming form around him.
Old Kai: (with Mexican accent) I have to lay off the bean bruittos.
CRASH!
Everyone goes out to see a crater, and a frozed Saiyan space ship.

Later, King kai de-frostes the ship to see a young Saiyan in the ship.

???: Ohhh, where am I?(He isn't dead, but is somehow in Other world. Don't ask how he got there, I don't even know, and I'm the one writing the story.)

King Kai: Who are you?
Elliot: My name is Elliot, I'm a Saiyan. Now where am I?
King Kai: Your in Other World.
King Kai goes into an explaination about Other World and the Kais.
Elliot: So I'm dead?
Kibito Kai: No, your alive. I sense a great power within you Elliot. All you need is some training and. . . North Kai!
King Kai: Hm?
Kibito Kai: Maybe with him, we won't need the ball! You and I can train him, and Ancestor can look up more on the ball if we need it.
Next Episode: The Return of Raditz.

Nice...

Thats good HyperWire,keep up the good work.

Episode 3: The return of Raditz

Kibito-kai(panting): Is th-that all y-you got?
Elliot: No way. Triple kiao-ken!
King Kai: NO!! Your body can't handle that yet!
Elliot: Watch me! Hiya.
Kibito-kai: Shockwave!
Elliot: Haha, you'll have to do better than that. Kamehameha!
King Kai: where'd he learn that?
Kibito-kai gets hit badly
Kibito-kai: Ohhhhh not cool. I got a hole in my leg.
Elliot: Oops, my bad. You ok?
Kibito-kai: I've got a hole in my freakin' leg! No i'm not ok!
Goku(telepatically to King Kai): King Kai, can you hear me?
King Kai: Goku? Yes I can hear you loud and clear.
Goku: I'm coming to Other World, I need to talk to you, face to face.
King Kai: Why? Just tell me now. I'm kinda busy right now.
Goku: Fine then, we can talk later.
King Kai: I'll call you when I'm done, but bring a Senzu bean with you ok?
Goku: Why? is someone hurt badly?
King Kai: Uh yeah, Kibito-Kai's got I hole in his leg, I'll explain later.

Later

King Kai: You've tried it at least 1000 times Elliot, Your body just can't handle a Kaio-ken times 50. Besides I need to call Goku now.
Elliot: Ok, maybe I do need a rest.
Kibito-Kai: Get that stupid monkey here please!
King Kai: Goku? Goku, can you hear me?
Goku: Rodger
King Kai: How'd you know my first name?
Goku: Lucky guess? Ok so you want me to come now?
King Kai: Now is fine.
Kibito-Kai: Maybe we sholud keep Elliot out of sight(starts to laugh)Rodger.

After hideing Elliot, Goku gives Kibito-Kai his Senzu bean and talks to King Kai about what ever they were talking about. . .
Goku: Well, I'd better head back to Earth.

Back on Earth

Raditz: Finally, I'll have a second chance a getting rid brother of mine.
Goku: Raditz, I thought I smelt something putrid. I see you didn't learn you lession the first time.
Raditz: Kakorrot. This time I will be the one teaching you the lesson!
Goku: I highly doubt it.
Raditz: Let me show you one of my new tricks, Haaaaaa(Goes Super Saiyan!)
Goku: What the f*ck?!
Raditz: Ha, this time you will be the one who dies!
Elliot: Not if I have anything to say about it! Goku, tag team?
Goku: I don't know who you are, but your on!
Blows fly back and fourth, and with his new Super Saiyan powers, he seems to be unstoppable. Even with Goku going Super Saiyan dosen't seem to be enough.
Elliot: Goku, maybe I should turn it up a notch, haaaaaaaaaaaa(Goes Super Saiyan 2). Now things should be even.
Goku: Maybe I should turn it up too. (Goes Super Saiyan 2)
Elliot: Twin-kamehameha?
Goku: Great idea.
Goku&Elliot: Ka-me-ha-me-ha!
Raditz: AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!(Dies again)
Goku: Thanks uh. . .
Elliot: My name's Elliot.

Next Episode: The ball of ki, time, and space.

this is interesting, and you have good ideas and creativity... but on my opinion you need to pay a little more attention to detail

Meaning?

He means describe in more deatil.I say that was awesome.

Episode 4: The ball of ki, time, and space.

Up at the Lookout, Elliot tells his story.
Elliot: When I was a young saiyan, I had been sent off to take over a planet like all other low class saiyans. Apparently my ship crashed into a frozen comet and my body was frozen. I grew up in an icy prison until I landed in Other World where I my Kibito-kai and King Kai. King Kai taught me the instant transmission, Kiao-ken, and the Spirt bomb. I faught with Kibito-Kai so I could get some training in, during the fighting I became a super saiyan, and accidently shot a Kamehameha and put a hole in Kibito-kai's leg.
Goku: I sense power in you just as much as I sensed in Uub. You should get some training in with all of us, then you'll be unstoppable.
Elliot: Thanks, I'll consider it, but I'm here to do something else.
Everyone: What is it?
Elliot: I'm here to give you guys something. This. . . the ball of Ki, time, and space. What it does is it will bring out power in as many of you as possible. Goku, Gohan, Vegeta, Piccolo, Krillin, Goten, and Trunks, come here please.
They aren't really sure if they should except of Goku, he moves up right away.
Elliot: I need you to touch the ball, just a finger will do.
Goku touches the ball. In a flash of light something amazing happens. Goku is standing there, but so is the Goku who was sent to take over Earth!

Kid Goku: Wow I'm old.
Goku: I've grown huh.

Next episode: The other me.

Cool but can i ask you something

I was gonna make a dragonball series but the simalaritys are:

Its after GT
Goku is not with shenron and did not absorb the dragonballs
Goku is not a kid.

I was wondering if you would be offended if this is too much like your story.

This is preety good.

On 03-May-2005 Trunks245 said:

Cool but can i ask you something

I was gonna make a dragonball series but the simalaritys are:

Its after GT
Goku is not with shenron and did not absorb the dragonballs
Goku is not a kid.

I was wondering if you would be offended if this is too much like your story.

Not at all, as long as you don't use the Ball of Ki, time, and space.