My Dedicated Fan Fiction:Final Life-The Chronicles

I made this as i was designing my RPG which is in progress.Anyway,i made the stroyline on Microsoft word,sent it to the internet,and i won in a contest on a forum.Back to this...

Long,long ago...4 Elements created the world...Fire,Water,Earth,and Wind.All 4 elements made the world as it was today,apart from what it was,over a million years ago.Before the elments appeared,the Earth rotted,Volcanoes erupted violently,the Sea became ferocious floods,and the Wind killed everything it touched.After the Elements were built,4 people were enthrusted with the elements power,to keep the world safe.After millions of years,the Elements are now in the Hands of four children.Arshes,Gloria,Basil,and Hilda.They know nothing of their ancestors,but that will chancge,today...

First chapter up soon.

Chapter 1 is up tommorow,i gotta go to bed now.

Also,this FF is dedicated to my Mum,who passed away 8 years ago.Thank you Mum,wherever you are...(tear drop)Thank you all who read this when it comes up tommorow.Good night everyone.

That was sweet,Tom,god bless ya mum,*cry,cry*
can this day get any more emotional????
And i will sure as hell read this,for you tom and your mum,good god, this is hard,*cry,cry*

I will read and print it if i have to

cant wait to read it tom

Sorry about your mum and I'll read chapter 1 for sure tomorrow.Good Night

Long live Emotions....

Jesus,i forgot discriptions!

Name:Arshes
Age:20
Gender:Male
Race:Warrior
Weapon:Ragnarok
Personality:Swift,ferious,first to judge,strong,likes to speak his mind.
Appearence:Short orange hair,blue eyes,red armour,brown platelegs,tough grey boots.

Name:Basil
Age:35
Gender:Male
Race:Lancer
Weapon:Dragon's Heroin
Personality:Strong,ferice,very quiet,predictable
Appearence:Medium brown hair,iron small helmet,blue eyes,grey armour,blue cape,blue clothes,red platelegs.

Name:Gloria
Age:18
Gender:Female
Race:Cleric
Weapon:Cleric Staff
Personality:Quiet,shy,very strong at heart,always there for her freinds.
Appearence:Medium blond hair,blue and purple clothes,brown trousers,golden plated shoes.

Name:Hilda
Age:15
Gender:Female
Race:Black Mage
Weapon:Mage Staff
Personality:Shy,strong at heart,extremly quiet,hidden.
Apperance:Blue wizard hat,orange hair,blue clothes,blue skirt,green shoes.

Chapter 1:The beggining

For the past few years,Arshes,Basil,Gloria and Hilda have all become the best of freinds,and have all been moved into the same town.Today is the year 2050,where monsters roam the world,and the Elements are being sapped from energy as every second passes...This day,is where the Chosen One's homes have been destroyed,their families slain,and their village slaughtered.

Arshes:(huffing)Come on you guys!We can take a breather here.
Basil:Do you know how hard it is to run away from our homes,while the village is being destroyed by the Shadow Knights?
Arshes:Of course i do!Hilda,Gloria,are you both...
Gloria:Im...ok...just...exhausted...
Hilda:Im ok,don't worry,we just have to keep going.
Arshes:But the next town is so far away!Do you expect us to keep going?
Basil:I would advise that before...OH SH!T!(all the group is surronded all of a sudden by Shadow Knights)DAMN!WE'RE SURRONDED!
Arshes:What do we do?
Basil:You tell me!Theres nothing we CAN do!
Gloria:....Except fight them!
Hilda:Your must be JOKING!We can't defeat them!
Arshes:Gloria's right!Everyone,prepare to defend yourselves!
Gloria:You guys try and keep them busy,i'll stay back and get ready.
Arshes:You got that right.Basil,prepare the Gunge Lance!
Shadow Knight:We can't let you escape,Commander Rouge's orders!
Basil:Shut up!(puts his lance in both hands,and charges it up)Arshes,now!
Arshes:Lets do this!(jumps onto the lance,and Basil hurls it up into the sky)
Basil:Now!!!!!Use it at your full power!!
Shadow Knight:You won't escape!(one charges towards Gloria,who is chanting a spell)
Hilda:Blaze!(throws a fireball into it,sending it back,scorching its armour)Finish them off Arshes!
Arshes:Gunge Blade!(uses sword,charges up while above the lance,and whacks the lance,sending it hurtling towards the ground)
Gloria:Activate,Wall!(a barrier surrongs Basil,Hilda and herself,while Arshes comes back to earth slowly)
Hilda:Blaze Lance!(Hilda casts a Blaze spell on the lance as it touches the ground,causing a explosiong)

After a minute or two,the dust setles to show a destroyed plains area,with Arshes inside Basil's barrier)

Gloria:Right,i'll drop the barriers...(she unchants the spell)veryone ok?
Arshes:Yeah...Im just...
Basil:Upset about our village being destroyed?
Hilda:I think we all are...
Gloria:Agreed.
Arshes:Come on....let's continue...

After a catasrophic battle,only the 4 remian of whats left of the village.Will they be able to continue on their journey?Will they be able to find the source of the Shadow Knights?Stay tuned for the next chapter of Final life-The Chronicles.

[you are good at this]

Not particually,notice i use...Person:Speech....way of writing,its the lower class writing,but im no good at..."something,something"said whoever...and so on.

Something tells me i made a mistake when i laid it out...i can't help but think its something important...

Chapter 2 up in about 1 hour,i need to...ah forget it.


CHAPTER IN CONSTRUCTION....

this is pretty good tom, i like it... but yes i do notice the person:speech format, dont decide that you're no good at something:something until we have read it, you should try just one chapter that way

Good point Chaotix.But maybe in C3,cos i already got C2 planned out.Up in a 1 hour's time

Beast,and nice end concluding chapter there,Tom,im sure Cez would like it,=D.

I'like the storie

You know what?I think not.Its HARD to impress Cez.If you please him.....you are a lucky son a gun.

I like the storie

Well,he has been nice about others ff's lately,im sure he'll like it,i just really want to read the next chapter!

On 08-May-2005 rickster said:

Cez sucks

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